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I am translating an official letter and I am struggling with this sentence (part of a numbered item list)

Receipt from you of a Contract the terms of which we are satisfied with

I was able to modify it a bit for clarity, into:

La réception de votre proposition du Contrat, dont les termes sont pour nous satisfaisants

I expecially wanted to avoid Avec les termes duquel. However, I realized I had to make changes to both parts of the sentence and I am afraid it changes the meaning too much.

What is a better translation for this sentence?

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  • "d'une votre" is incorrect.
    – Destal
    Apr 12, 2017 at 9:39
  • @SimonDéchamps edited. It was from a previous draft, thank you Apr 12, 2017 at 9:40

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Depending on how your list of items is introduced, the article might be optional; no capital for contrat and there should be no comma before dont. I would slightly modify the first part of your sentence that way:

Réception de votre part d'un contrat dont les termes sont pour nous satisfaisants

or, to remove the potential ambiguity introduced by de votre part:

Réception d'un contrat de votre part dont les termes sont pour nous satisfaisants

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  • "Réception de votre part" me laisse penser que ce sont les autres qui ont reçu le contrat.
    – Destal
    Apr 12, 2017 at 11:15
  • @SimonDéchamps ok, réponse modifiée.
    – jlliagre
    Apr 12, 2017 at 11:32
  • About the article, in depends on how the list is introduced. Apr 12, 2017 at 11:36
  • @StéphaneGimenez Indeed, answer updated.
    – jlliagre
    Apr 12, 2017 at 11:38
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Je tenterai un : Réception de votre contrat dont les termes nous sont satisfaisants.

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