0

Ok, I'm working on a translation (just to practice my French) and have come to a point where I cannot tell, whether or not my translation is actually correct. To me "entrer en contact avec" and "améliorer nos réseaux" make sense, but is that how these expressions are actually used? I'll provide you with the original text and my translation so far. I tried not to stick to the text too closely but still include the most relevant information.

English

This year we want to connect with as many likeminded people as possible. Together, we want to learn new things, build stronger networks and discuss alternatives to current ways of life in order to look after our climate better. And during our "days of action" we want to point the way for climate justice – together.

French

Cette année nous voulons entrer en contact avec le plus grand nombre de personnes partageant le même état d'esprit que nous. Ensemble, nous voulons en apprendre et en proposer plus, nous voulons améliorer nos réseaux et nous voulons discuter d’alternatives au notre mode de vie, parce que nous devons prendre soin du climat et de l’environnement. Pendant notre « journées d’action » nous voulons indiquer la route à suivre pour atteindre la justice climatique.

P.S.: I'm new to this forum and don't know my way around yet. I'm sorry if the formating is off or if I should have posed my question differently. Thanks so much for your feedback!

Improve this question

1 Answer 1

Reset to default
0

Entrer en contact and améliorer1 nos réseaux are fine and might be used by native people.

As a side comment, while your text is quite good French, there are a few issues like these ones :

  • en apprendre et en proposer plus doesn't seem to match "learn new things" and the two en are odd here.

  • au notre mode de vie is incorrect, should be à notre...

  • parce que nous devons doesn't translate "in order to".

  • notre needs to agree with journées

  • we do not use German quotes „xxx“ but guillemets « xxx » 2.

1 Instead of améliorer, renforcer or consolider would better match stronger.

2 Azaghal corrected your question in the meantime.

Improve this answer
4
  • 1
    améliorer nos réseaux is definitely fine but in this context I would prefer renforcer nos réseaux to keep the idea of strength of the original text.
    – Azaghal
    Jul 20, 2018 at 7:30
  • @Azaghal Yes, renforcer can be used here, consolider too.
    – jlliagre
    Jul 20, 2018 at 8:47
  • @Azaghal Thanks a lot for your feedback! Sorry about the quotations marks, I completely forgot. I now made the following suggested changes: renforcer nos réseaux, à notre and nos journées ...
    – Amb
    Jul 22, 2018 at 20:00
  • @Azaghal I understand that parce que nous devons doesn't translate to "in order to" but think it won't make much of a difference? I also changed en apprendre et en proposer plus to apprendre de nouvelles choses but I'm not sure if that works. It sounds a little too simple, but maybe that's what's best? Also, thank you @jlliagre!
    – Amb
    Jul 22, 2018 at 20:24

Your Answer

By clicking “Post Your Answer”, you agree to our terms of service and acknowledge that you have read and understand our privacy policy and code of conduct.

Not the answer you're looking for? Browse other questions tagged or ask your own question.